Friday, June 24, 2016

Siberian tiger story

Moa Story
WALT recount/ retell  an interesting event.
The purpose of our story is to entertain, retell and inform.

Success Criteria:
Content & ideas
  • Hook in the reader at the start - hint of a problem
  • Create suspense- don’t give too much information- give clues
  • Sentence Formation
  • Write a variety of sentence starters and vary the lengths of sentences to create excitement.
  • I use interesting verbs and describing words.
  • I choose words suitable to the topic
  • Introduction - setting (time, weather, place etc), character/s
  • Middle - problem
  • Conclusion (ending)
  • One paragraph for one idea and detail about the one idea.
  • I write most essential list words accurately - no sloppy mistakes.
  • I use basic punctuation correctly        
  • . , ! ? “ “
  • I am proofreading and checking my writing

Start your story here:
10.00 clock in the morning, summertime my family and I were tramping in the bush. The sun was shining really bright that it hurt my eyes.
Suddenly  I found some paw prints that were very huge they looked like a cat’s pawprints but they were like, five times bigger, so I followed them.

Half an hour later my family left me behind all lost in the bush by myself would I survive?
Suddenly the pawprints stopped they ended at a big tree and there were scratch marks going up to the top of the tree, so I began to climb it wasn’t easy to climb though.
There sitting on the top branch was... a white tiger, my eyes were almost gonna pop out.
I thought white tigers were extinct I tried to be quiet,  until it saw me,it’s face was covered in scars.
Slowly I climbed down from the tree, it followed me and rubbed against my legs when I reached bottom, it bent  down and purred it was like he was telling me to jump on him, so I did,  and he started to walk into the bushes.
He took me to an old shed he gathered some leaves for me to sleep in, and he fell asleep in another bigger pile of leaves, after a while I fell asleep too.
When I woke up he was there with a piece of raw deer in his mouth he wanted me to eat it but I saved it for something special.

After that we went for a little ride in the bushes we went to a river that had a waterfall and he went behind it, behind the waterfall was a whole pride of white tigers, big ones small ones. Soon I started to realize that white tigers aren’t that scary after all. After spending time behind the waterfall we walked back to the old shed again I still had the piece of meat left from lunch.

Then he went hunting again, and when he came back he had another deer in his mouth and I started a fire and cooked the meat.
After that we went to bed.
In the morning it was time to go back to the waterfall to see the family of tigers again. When we came back to the shed we and had a big rest.

A month later my family came back and I had to hide the tigers so I said goodbye and went to go find my family.
A few weeks later we went back to the bush this time I packed a first aid kit and some lunch that will last  for a week.

Slowly I creeped away from my family to spend  one more week with the white tigers again.
I kept the secret all to myself and never ever told anyone not even my best friend, about the whole pride of beautiful White Tigers that I saw with my very own eyes.


children shouldn't get paid

I strongly believe that children shouldn’t get paid to come to school.
My reasons are that children would just come to school for money, sneak out of school and spend the money, as well our school would run out of money.

Reason #1
Just come to school for money
  • Greedy and rude
  • Could cause children to bully other children - give me your money which they will use in a bad way
  • Nothing to look forward to when you are an adult
I strongly believe that children shouldn’t get paid for coming to school because they would just come to school for money and they would become greedy and rude.  
And they would have nothing to look forward to when they become older.

Reason #2
Sneak off to the dairy during school time and they won’t learn to save
  • Children might spend money on expensive items and then they might lose the item or it might get stolen.
Secondly, children will sneak out of school and go to the dairy and pretend to go to the toilet instead and they might spend their money and the item might get stolen or they might lose it too and they won’t know how to save.

Reason #3
School runs out of money
  • teachers won’t get paid
  • No bike track etc
  • Where is the money going to come from?

Thirdly, where is the money going come from, and who is gonna give it to us?   And there is gonna be no bike track and the teachers won’t get paid for teaching us all the stuff that we are supposed to know for when we are older.

Those were my main reasons to support my argument of why children shouldn’t get paid.

Learning should be enough reward

The Koala and the crocodile

The Koala and the crocodile
One day the Koala was at the watering hole and then a Crocodile came by, the Koala didn’t see the hungry Croc approaching closer and closer to him and then...SNAP! Went the croc but the Croc didn’t EAT the Koala the Koala was stuck between his sharp jaws that were trying to close and eat the frightened little Koala that was trying to open the Croc’s jaws so he could escape.
He was feeling hot and sweaty but he had to think of something to do, maybe he could climb out by distracting the Croc, so he thought he could make a sound that could hurt the Croc’s ears and then he could climb out and walk away.
So he made a noise and the Croc’s ears were very sore and he quickly climbed out and luckily none was hurt and from now on  the Koala wouldn’t go near another Crocodile ever again.
The End.        

My Holiday

My holiday - Select a picture to explain.
Snap shot;

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Snap shot

Interesting beginning- grabs the readers attention
Interesting word choices
when, where, who ,why
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Oh No! The storm knoked the caravan over during the night.Queitly I tip toed to the kitchen in the up side down caravan, it was very squashed and it was very hard to get around because the rain fluded the kitchen. Slowly I walked into mum and dad’s room they were fast asleep very, very queitly I woke them, and told what was going on. When they woke up properly and got changed dad tried to lift up the caravan but it was too heavy, so we all helped and it was still too heavy. I thought for a while, ‘mabey we need to take a few things out’ I said to mum and dad so we can lift it up. So we spent half of the day taking things out of the caravan, after a while we tried to lift the caravan up again and it stood up, and we spent the rest of the day packing the stuff back in the caravan. Fainally it was six o clock it was time to go  back to our holiday but there was one problem were is our car?

The Haunted House

The haunted house

I see…The moonlight shine onto the house that hasn’t been lived in for years

I feel...Cobwebs and old antique things ,torn down velvet curtains and draft coming in from the windows.
I smell… Blood on the ground, stale air, rotten skeleton bones
I hear...whispering sounds coming from nowhere
I taste...Rotten air floats into my mouth
I think...That this old house is really haunted and ghosts still live here...

Sad dogs

Dear Humans
You should go to the pet  shop or the dog pound and buy a sad dog.   It will have a happier home living with you and won’t be so sad anymore because you can play with it and it will learn not to be sad anymore!
There is too many sad dogs just lying around in the same cage every day and not having fun, it's like a jail!
Imagine if you were trapped in jail and not having fun with others and not run around at the park, well that's how I feel, stuffed up in a cage and nobody would adopt me. I’m not even allowed to play outside and do fun things with my friends like you do.
That's how I feel because I am locked up in a cage and not having fun with you.
I don’t want to be feed the same food each day, I want to be free and catch the stick I want someone to talk to someone to play with me!
Why did you lock me up in a cage anyway I haven't done anything wrong, I want to play, I want to travel.
I have had enough of this stinking old cage I want to smell the fresh air, I want to be free.

P.B.L-Christina -pet Enclosure

Christina’s House Mouse Enclosure
My Creature is a…
House Mouse.
Some things I needed to consider about my creature:
My House Mouse needs ramps, tunnels, a Mouse wheel, string to chew on and a bed to sleep in.
It also needs activities to keep it busy ,food,water.
Lastly some space to run around in because they are really tiny and they need lots of space to run around in.
My enclosure has these special features for my pet:
It needs a Hamster wheel, a two story ramp, toys and a little maze for it to go through.
What I am pleased about:
I am pleased with Hamster wheel and the ramps and the tunnels and the maze to go through.
What I have found tricky:
What I found tricky was... finding a stand for my Hamster wheel and gluing the ramps together and gluing the roof bit on because I burned my finger and it stung.
What I would like to improve:
Next time I would improve to cover up the holes properly and and not rush to be more careful with the glue-gun putting less more hay in the bed and also not put string in the bed.